Comic 31 - A Weak Sister

18th Sep 2018, 9:00 AM
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A Weak Sister
Average Rating: 5 (2 votes)

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Author Notes:

18th Sep 2018, 9:00 AM
rickrudge
This is the last page of this Tag Forester series. I hope that you enjoyed it. Also, I hope that nobody takes any negative stereotyping off of this, or my other stories. It’s all fictional crap coming out of my head.

Thank you so much for checking out, rating, commenting, and subscribing to my comix. There will be more Tag Forester comix, as well as Drako the Barbarian (and TC comix) in the near future.

I’m going to be taking some time off from posting my comix. I’ve got some big travel plans and a couple of other major projects that will keep me busy for awhile, but I hope to be getting back to posting here on ComicFury very soon. I will Private Message notify all of the past subscribers, letting them know when a new comic series is being posted so you don’t miss out.

Thank you again.

— Rick Rudge

Comments:

18th Sep 2018, 1:58 PM
...(RockB)
Oh man, so many open questions:
Did they take a shower together?
Did Yoss still want Tag to meet her aunt after the shower?
Did the aunt approve?
If yes, was she OK with them not getting married?
If not, why are they still together?

And besides:
Who murdered Camila?
Who murdered everybody else (in the unlikely case that there were two murderers)?
Did the police catch the murderer(s)?
Was Yoss satisfied with the murderer of Camila behind bars?
Who became the new gang boss?

And I'd also be remotely interested in how the murders were done, I mean, Chepe was like your friendly neighbor but he had some good security and I bet everybody who had to deal with him (<- pun not intended, even though...) liked him. Murdering Camila was probably no challenge but I see no reason why. The others are IMHO somewhere in between.

(I see good reasons why you end it here, real-world reasons. Buuut... any chance for some real wrapping up and answering at least some of the questions in-comic? I mean later, either in another comic, or in a short epilogue, out of Bob Chin's thoughts?)

(I'd give a 4.5 rating because on one hand there's sooo many questions, but on the other hand, it works as a wrap-up as told by Bob Chin. Since I have to decide on an integer rating and rounding rules say to round up if the first fraction digit is 5, so be it. 8))

(Oh and TIA for the PM :))
19th Sep 2018, 12:07 PM
rickrudge
Here I thought I was doing good too. I still need to work on my writing skills.

The character who did all of these murders was never named. I should have named him in page 5. Yoss had the name Manuel tattooed on her stomach. That could have fit right into the story. Yoss had suspected that he had got Camila on heroin. He later killed Camila to take care of a loose end.

This guy was high-up in the gang and could easily have gotten up close to the other victims to kill them too. It would have been better if Tag had explained that after page 29 like most detective stories.

Once the character was exposed by Yoss in that fight on page 30, the killer was stabbed inside the the holding cell at the city jail, most likely by fellow gang members. Again, because I never named the guy, you really couldn’t know who she was talking about. Due to page constraints, it wasn’t explained very well on page 31. The killer was the boss-apparent, but was killed and “the gang boss position is open again”, now a new boss of the gang would need to be chosen.

This whole story is told in flashback by the lawyer, Bob Chin from page 2 and then on page 31. This is a prequel to the Tag Forester stories and explained how Tag and Yoss got together, so, yeah they did get showered up and Tag got introduced to Yoss’s aunt. In Latin culture, family is very important. Although I’ve never written anything about Yoss’s family, but a close aunt has been mentioned in other stories.

I hope that this clears up all of the holes, that I left in this story. Thanks again for all of your comments, Rock.
20th Sep 2018, 4:54 PM
...(RockB)
Yeah, thank you for the explanations.

I read the last 3 pages again. At page 29, Tag suggests that the one who comes up as the new boss is most likely the killer and on page 30 someone from off-panel (most likely Yoss) accused him to be the murderer. Then him getting shanked also fit into this picture. Yeahh well... I'm not a detective, by far.

Anyway, for some reason I can't put a finger on I enjoyed this story the most - so far :)
(And being a writer... I fantasized about 3 "super heroes" for years. Couldn't get the first 2 to work and the last one became too powerful and left earth to deal with problems of galactic level. So no stories at all. That's several levels worse than leaving a few questions not clearly answered :-))
15th Oct 2018, 10:11 PM
AmeliaP
There is nothing wrong with your writing skills. I noticed the readers think it's hard to follow detective/noir/conspiracy stories online. It's the main reason this kind of story isn't popular online. Readers come for a quick fix. Long stories with many details get the readers confused and it's better to leave them to print versions (or compiled versions for Kindle/Comixology, etc.

I gave up on conspiracy thriller story too. After I finish my current graphic novel, I'll do exclusive online content with almost no dialogue, more action and pussy-down (aka less violent) short stories easier to follow, you know. I'm already adapting some stories for that. It's not bad, shorter story with less to none dialogue are a good way to improve the visual storytelling skills.
21st Oct 2018, 12:50 PM
rickrudge
Thanks for your comment, AmeliaP. I guess that since web comics are in a serial style, you’re right, that it would be more difficult to have a series of clues, or even keeping up with suspects. That could be why I keep my stories short. Well, besides me having a short attention span, myself. :-)

I did try to have more sex and violence to keep people’s attention. I also tried to leave the end of each page where readers might want to check out the next page, but yeah, you’re right about not having the same effect as my Drako the Barbarian series.

With Drako, I have sort of gotten the influence of the Prince Valiant comic series. The Tag Forester series doesn’t seem to work the same way. Thanks again.